Last summer, my oldest daughter and I were in our back yard and she stepped on a rock in the grass. She yelped. I said, "Are you alright?" She replied that she was. Sensing the opportunity to be a smartass, I replied by saying, "Oh! I wasn't asking you. I was talking to the rock." She rolled her eyes, as was called for and then said, "Oh Daddy! Stop it! Rocks can't get hurt, they don't have feelings." She was quiet for a few moments and then said, "I'm glad I am not a rock." "I'm glad you're not a rock, either." Thanks for reminding me of the importance of a heart that has feelings. :)
Love this beauty.Yes,one who loves more may break & turn to dust in the effort to win over the stone-hearted love of his/her life but I would rather be the fine particles floating away on the wind than the hard ,unmoving stone!Great imagery & loved the pic.Oh & so glad your love has a malleable gold heart :-)
That might of been me, having come out of a divorce, and this other girl was very persistent in trying to be my next love.
ReplyDeleteI love the disclaimer! And I truly loved the last 4 lines.
ReplyDeleteI love this. It's form and sentiment is so perfect, and it could have been written for my mother.
ReplyDeleteAlso, must confess, I love the rock, and pinched the picture. Wow.
this is like every good 80's ballad or every song from the 70's that talks of a love lost, of a relationship that is one sided and cruel to one party.
ReplyDeleteI loved this.
"Sharpening the ache" ..such a gorgeous line.
great imagery
ReplyDelete"I am not defeated.
ReplyDeleteOnly scattered by gentle winds." Makes me wonder where the winds will take you...
Oh, and I love your disclaimer at the end! :)
Last summer, my oldest daughter and I were in our back yard and she stepped on a rock in the grass. She yelped. I said, "Are you alright?" She replied that she was. Sensing the opportunity to be a smartass, I replied by saying, "Oh! I wasn't asking you. I was talking to the rock." She rolled her eyes, as was called for and then said, "Oh Daddy! Stop it! Rocks can't get hurt, they don't have feelings." She was quiet for a few moments and then said, "I'm glad I am not a rock." "I'm glad you're not a rock, either." Thanks for reminding me of the importance of a heart that has feelings. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely, especially the line "Sharpening the ache." Beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteWords from a survivor-words that inspire! This was breathtakingly gorgeous writing!
ReplyDeleteEmotional 33-words. I'm glad it wasn't based on personal experience (love the disclaimer, BTW!)
ReplyDeletewell executed. Like the others, "sharpening the ache" and scattered like winds really spoke to me.
ReplyDeleteThere is a strength in this that I am really liking. Love the disclaimer too. Kind of sweet!
ReplyDeleteI liked the disclaimer, too. :-)
ReplyDeleteI, too, liked "sharpening the ache". I wonder where the winds will take her..
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Indeed words of survival...almost to ashes to ashes dust to dust. Powerful 33 words.
ReplyDeleteLove this beauty.Yes,one who loves more may break & turn to dust in the effort to win over the stone-hearted love of his/her life but I would rather be the fine particles floating away on the wind than the hard ,unmoving stone!Great imagery & loved the pic.Oh & so glad your love has a malleable gold heart :-)
ReplyDeleteCute disclaimer (: The piece is great too!
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutly beautiful!
ReplyDeleteVery nice :-)
ReplyDeleteI love the line that goes, "You crush me...". Such a wonderful image!
ReplyDeletescattered by gentle winds - nice.
ReplyDeleteAlso the disclaimer lol