Friday, March 08, 2013

Heart of Stone-Trifextra

 
Your heart, stone.
I grind away at the granite
That is your nature.
I fail again
Sharpening the ache.
You crush me
To fine particles,
I am not defeated.
Only scattered by gentle winds. *

The prompt is Stone. 33 words exactly
                                             
*Sweet Mr BC, this is not about you.  This is not based on any personal pain.
MR BC has a heart of gold.





21 comments :

  1. That might of been me, having come out of a divorce, and this other girl was very persistent in trying to be my next love.

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  2. I love the disclaimer! And I truly loved the last 4 lines.

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  3. I love this. It's form and sentiment is so perfect, and it could have been written for my mother.

    Also, must confess, I love the rock, and pinched the picture. Wow.

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  4. this is like every good 80's ballad or every song from the 70's that talks of a love lost, of a relationship that is one sided and cruel to one party.

    I loved this.

    "Sharpening the ache" ..such a gorgeous line.

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  5. "I am not defeated.
    Only scattered by gentle winds." Makes me wonder where the winds will take you...

    Oh, and I love your disclaimer at the end! :)

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  6. Last summer, my oldest daughter and I were in our back yard and she stepped on a rock in the grass. She yelped. I said, "Are you alright?" She replied that she was. Sensing the opportunity to be a smartass, I replied by saying, "Oh! I wasn't asking you. I was talking to the rock." She rolled her eyes, as was called for and then said, "Oh Daddy! Stop it! Rocks can't get hurt, they don't have feelings." She was quiet for a few moments and then said, "I'm glad I am not a rock." "I'm glad you're not a rock, either." Thanks for reminding me of the importance of a heart that has feelings. :)

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  7. This is lovely, especially the line "Sharpening the ache." Beautifully written!

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  8. Words from a survivor-words that inspire! This was breathtakingly gorgeous writing!

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  9. Emotional 33-words. I'm glad it wasn't based on personal experience (love the disclaimer, BTW!)

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  10. well executed. Like the others, "sharpening the ache" and scattered like winds really spoke to me.

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  11. There is a strength in this that I am really liking. Love the disclaimer too. Kind of sweet!

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  12. I liked the disclaimer, too. :-)

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  13. I, too, liked "sharpening the ache". I wonder where the winds will take her..

    Well done!

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  14. Indeed words of survival...almost to ashes to ashes dust to dust. Powerful 33 words.

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  15. Love this beauty.Yes,one who loves more may break & turn to dust in the effort to win over the stone-hearted love of his/her life but I would rather be the fine particles floating away on the wind than the hard ,unmoving stone!Great imagery & loved the pic.Oh & so glad your love has a malleable gold heart :-)

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  16. Cute disclaimer (: The piece is great too!

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  17. This is absolutly beautiful!

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  18. I love the line that goes, "You crush me...". Such a wonderful image!

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  19. scattered by gentle winds - nice.

    Also the disclaimer lol

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